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Discussion in 'La Torre de Babel' started by lordtever, Apr 17, 2010. Replies: 5 | Views: 736

  1. lordtever

    lordtever Poeta recién llegado

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    In the depths of my mind catacombs
    all the sadness and the insecurities
    grows constantly
    as the day goes by
    in this place where there's no light

    In my lonely heart
    there's only one star
    that tries to shine...
    but fear has it shy

    In the depths of my mind catacombs
    the tears are silent
    and the screams are louder
    than a thousand children
    screaming out loud
    as they wake up from a nightmare

    My mind is a nightmare itself
    and there is no end for it
    there is no new day
    I'm the catacombs
    and my mind never stops darkening,
    never stops sinking
    as this underground jail
    sinks in cold water
     
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  2. Rosa Ignea

    Rosa Ignea Poeta veterano y reconocido en el portal.

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    en la cueva de la mente
    suenan los gritos del silencio
    que idolatran a la penumbra de la soledad,
    y se vuelve fria y eterna la obscuridad que la encierra...
    me gusto mucho tu obra poeta aunque te confiezo que no se nada de ingles me toco traducirlo jajaj, pero me resulto bastante interesante mis estrellas abrazos felicidades
     
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  3. Viten

    Viten Poeta fiel al portal

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    Your mind is great! and your melancholy... That written is awesome.
    (Necesito practicar mucho más mi escritura en inglés :p)

    Grandes pinceladas de melancolía compañero, atrapan y cautivan; especialmente el segundo verso:

    Gran metáfora.

    Saludos... Stars to you...

    :)
     
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  4. lordtever

    lordtever Poeta recién llegado

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    gracias por sus comments
     
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    Pemberley Winter Poeta asiduo al portal

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    the only thing I can say is: dark, dark, dark..and excellent. You are very very good writing images.it was perfectly clear at least for me to imagine that dark place....where...it seems that you are trapped without a clue and without help.
    When we are in the shadows we are not able to forgive, forget and also to think. You'll soon get to the light. And you will soon find the help you need..to destroy that awful feeling.
    Hugs For youuu, Pemb
     
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  6. lordtever

    lordtever Poeta recién llegado

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    I Like it dark :)
     
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