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Discussion in 'La Torre de Babel' started by Aonika, Feb 10, 2009. Replies: 2 | Views: 904

  1. Aonika

    Aonika Poeta recién llegado

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    Traveling in circles everywhere I go
    Feeling like Im breaking
    All the things I know
    Crying with myself
    When I am alone.

    Looking away
    And everything is gone.

    What could I do
    To see and feel a change
    Closing my eyes
    Opening them again.

    Telling to my mind
    To stay awake all day
    Telling to my heart
    To wash away the pain.

    Sitting in the last chair
    Nothing makes sense again…
     
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    Aonika, Feb 10, 2009
  2. Drym

    Drym Poeta recién llegado

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    Hullo, friend! Instead of "telling" it should be "saying to my mind", if you mean to keep the other three words. You'd have to drop the "to", if you want to keep the "telling".

    Same goes for the 4th line of that strophe. Saying to my heart.
     
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    Drym, Mar 22, 2009
  3. Aonika

    Aonika Poeta recién llegado

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    Thank you, I like to break the rules.
     
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    Aonika, Mar 27, 2009

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