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Deceiving Mirrors

Discussion in 'La Torre de Babel' started by Rael88, Jan 26, 2006. Replies: 3 | Views: 1311

  1. Rael88

    Rael88 Poeta recién llegado

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    Any day any week, I don´t care
    wake up, sleepy feelings
    deceiving mirrors in the ceiling
    and sickly changing speakings
    a returning noisy call
    too filled up exploting balloons

    Our photo in a crooked frame
    wishing someone breaks the spell
    of spiderwebs and dirty hand stamps
    Young happy smiles twist into this
    the reflection of deceiving mirrors
    We are just images in the air

    Undeveloped photographs
    Everything streches,breaks and grows
    Limbs and bones far away
    Squeezed off tears rags
    and nobody told us
    of those deceiving mirrors

    Won´t you save me
    Won´t you take me
    to your lonely special place
    come and hunt loneliness for me
    Won´t you save me
    Won´t you take me
    to your fading star
    come and hunt myself away
     
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  2. jagüey

    jagüey Poeta recién llegado

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    This is a really good work, I think you injected some extremely good images into it, and the sounds made by the syllables just feel right for the subject. The questions at the end make an interesting point about how life can be so confusing and strange... deceptive. Very well composed!
    jaguey
     
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  3. mariposita

    mariposita Poeta que considera el portal su segunda casa

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    [center:e7952d498e]I like this poem,
    I think it's interesting and well structured.
    :wink: Take care...
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  4. Rael88

    Rael88 Poeta recién llegado

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    Thanks both of you Jaguey and Mariposita for your critics! :D
     
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