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Discussion in 'La Torre de Babel' started by Raven, Aug 21, 2005. Replies: 11 | Views: 2114

  1. Raven

    Raven Poeta fiel al portal

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    [center:551aba2922]Sleep,
    Sleep tight ‘til the dark may pass
    I am thy singing raven
    Watching over your heart of glass.

    Your closed eyes
    Are a peaceful tomb for my sepulchral sadness
    The warm sheets that cover my soul
    The one and unique motive of my madness.

    Your frozen image
    Break my chains of pain
    As dead leaves shiver
    With the fall of November rain.

    Your lips seem like a sleeping rose
    Hiding his velvet face soon
    From the silver bright
    Of the graceless moon,
    Eternally quiet
    Like a forgotten tune.

    Blinding my self to thy crystalline beauty
    Would be a grave-willing sin
    Who could not crave
    The silk of thy milky skin?

    I can’t help dropping
    A bleaky tear
    Finding in the gloom
    The sweet smell of thy golden hair.

    The obscure in my soul
    Lies dying for your embrace
    I carry these clumsy wings
    And bend them over the kindness of your grace.

    I would sink in the perfumed waters
    Of your charming marble pale
    And drown in the grasp of your blue blood,
    Feeling the delicate hand of Doom
    Building my sanctuary of stone from this room.

    Any time
    Any where
    I will still be there
    In the ominous night of our lives
    Watching over your bed
    Guarding your dreams.

    In the shadows I peep
    Patiently above thy chamber door
    As you sleep
    You will not be alone
    Never More.[/center:551aba2922]


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  2. Ernesto J.

    Ernesto J. Poeta fiel al portal

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    Any time
    Any where
    I will still be there
    In the ominous night of our lives
    Watching over your bed
    Guarding your dreams.

    Wooooooo!
    Veryooooogoodly :wink:
    with my puertorican english... thank u for shared.
    :roll: :wink: :roll: :wink: :roll:
     
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  3. Rafael Chavez

    Rafael Chavez Poeta adicto al portal

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    Raven hermano:

    Tus ojos cerrados
    Son una tumba pasifica para mi tristeza sepulcral
    Las tibias hojas que cubren mi alma
    Son mi primer y unico motivo de mi locura

    En que estabas pensando.

    Es un poema muy bueno para una despedida.
    espero que ella no te dejara a ti.
     
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  4. ~*Evelyn Denisse*~

    ~*Evelyn Denisse*~ Poeta fiel al portal

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    Hey Raven!!!!!!!!!

    Te doy mil felicitaciones por tu nueva faceta... POLIFACéTICO!!! hahaha. Oye, le metes bien duro en la costilla al inglés. Me encantó, es la descripción más cálida que haya leído, lástima que hay tan pocos románticos, ya les bateaste a todos el casco con tu poemazo. Sigue asi, "Sir".

    CDT,
    TQM
    ~*Eve Deckie*~ :wink:
    (Viva, con impúlso pesimista)
     
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  5. Raven

    Raven Poeta fiel al portal

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    Gracias a los tres. No suelo escribir en inglés pero el acabado final me encanta. Suena de otra manera (y eso que el idioma es el único valor patrio que defiendo)...

    Aunque me toma el doble de tiempo rodeándome de diccionarios y demás, pero creo que luego merece la pena.

    De todas formas creo que no hay muchos aficionados a los idiomas en mundopoesia...
     
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  6. Etherea

    Etherea Poeta fiel al portal

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    Precioso poema que debía resucitar.

    Me ha encantado. Sabes a dar a cada poema un toque especial.
    Muy buen trabajo, en serio.

    YOU RULE!!!!!!!!!!!


    Besitos celestes,

    La dama detrás del espejo
     
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  7. Raven

    Raven Poeta fiel al portal

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    You rule, sweetheart... Believe me.

    Hehe! Thanks 4your opinion.
     
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  8. lo disfrute del principio al final Raven, no se mucho ingles pero en este foro los pongo en practica, el tuyo me ha gustado mucho

    salu2 AMIGO... aunque lo nieges muahaha... es broma, hasta luego
     
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  9. I understand perfectly what you have to go throught because it happens ti me in spanish and that makes me appreciate your writting in english---THANK GOODNESS FOR DICTIONARIES!!!

    XOXOXO
     
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  10. Byroniana

    Byroniana Poeta fiel al portal

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    Del principio al final, del final al rpincipio, y justo en la última línea un escalofrío me empapó el frío del alma y la dulzura de haberte leido. Indudablemente...el final es sobrecogedor, al menos para mí
     
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  11. Ryahsseto

    Ryahsseto Poeta recién llegado

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    I really liked your poem. It's very nice and beautiful ^^

    So lovable words you wrote. Guess so pretty feelings you had.
     
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  12. LoryCross

    LoryCross Poeta recién llegado

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    I think is kinda gothic... pero está construido maravillosamente. Muy bueno. Un saludo.
     
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