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If Only I could..

Discussion in 'La Torre de Babel' started by Esme, Jun 5, 2008. Replies: 34 | Views: 4220

  1. Esme

    Esme Poeta adicto al portal

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    ..If only I could..


    If only I could write in the sky what I feel for you…
    If only I could breath the air that surrounds you…
    If only I could fly with my broken wings...
    If only I could survive and live without you by my side.

    Sweet are the dreams at night when I imagine you next
    To my side. Bitter sour is the taste in my mouth when
    I awake in the morning, only to see the reality of my agonizing truth.

    To see that I don’t have you by my side.
    To see how your name has disappeared from the sky...
    To see how you came only to steal my breath...
    To see how you destroyed me, and the dreams...
    That one day made me fly...
    To see how much I love you and all you've done
    Is tear my heart apart.

    Dedicated to a
    broken heart....
     
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  2. Francisco Iván Pazualdo

    Francisco Iván Pazualdo Poeta veterano en el portal

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    Que ese corazon Esme no se quiebre se que tus sueños son dulces cuando te imaginas tenerlo a el contigo si solo pudieras hacer tantas cosas si pudieras escribir en el cielo lo que tu sientes por el seria maravilloso es hermoso tu poema y que bueno que pude entederlo del todo te quedo profundo y trste besos linda un placer leerte.
     
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  3. BORRADO3

    BORRADO3 Poeta recién llegado

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    Wonderfull poem poet friend, beautifull, your verses are sad but maybe another love is going to cure your hurt heart..

    Kisses for you..
    A pleasure visit you
     
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  4. Felipe Antonio Santorelli

    Felipe Antonio Santorelli Poeta que considera el portal su segunda casa

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    The pain of the absence is even worst when there has been deceiving.
    My stars for your poem, hugs and kisses.
    P.S.: Sorry for my English I hope I did not make to many mistakes.
     
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  5. Esme

    Esme Poeta adicto al portal

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    Gracias hermoso por tus palabras que siempre son tan alentadoras.. Y si Luneta seria maravilloso poder escribir las cosas que uno siente en el cielo.. :). Un placer recibirte. Besitosss!!!:::hug:::
     
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  6. Esme

    Esme Poeta adicto al portal

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    Muchas gracias amiga por tu comentario. Un placer para mi tenerte entre mis letras. Besitosss!!
     
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  7. Esme

    Esme Poeta adicto al portal

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    Well first of all let me thank you for your time and your presence in my little corner, my pleasure. Hugss and kisses for you aswell!!:::hug:::
     
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  8. MAHANA

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    This poem totally hugs my heart...
    that is really the equivalent of how this poem
    makes me feel.
     
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  9. jesse salas

    jesse salas Poeta que considera el portal su segunda casa

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    I really like that way You wrote this poem, well done , greetings from the south Jess
     
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  10. Esme

    Esme Poeta adicto al portal

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    Thank you so much for your thoughts and coment. I'm glad you liked it. Here i leave you more of those wonderful hugsssss!!!! :::hug:::
     
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    Esme Poeta adicto al portal

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    Hello first of all let me thank you for your time and thoughts regarding my poem. Its my pleasure to have you presence here in my corner. Hugss and kissesss!:::hug:::
     
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  12. DEJAVU

    DEJAVU Poeta adicto al portal

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    I enjoyed your poem. Even sadness is able to generate beauty, we just have to manage it the right way. Thanks for sharing. Regards,

    DEJAVU
     
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  13. Esme

    Esme Poeta adicto al portal

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    Thank you for your comment and thoughts about my poem. My pleasure receiving you in this my little corner. Hugss and kissesss!
     
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  14. elpoetaz

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    A wonderfull poem, it touch my heart, that part of the broken wings made me tremble and cry. My stars for you, also my love.
     
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    Esme Poeta adicto al portal

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    Gracias por tu comentario un placer como siempre amigo. Besitosss cuidate!:::hug:::
     
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    Eugenio Poeta que considera el portal su segunda casa

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    Dreams...

    Dreams are dreams just that...
    But we can make them real, just dreaming...

    It's plesaure read you

    Kisses

    Eugenio
     
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  17. Esme

    Esme Poeta adicto al portal

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    Thank you for your time, alot of truth in what you say
    dreams are just dreams... but without them we wouldn't
    survive. my pleasure to see you here in this my corner. Kissess and hugs. :::hug:::
     
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  18. Very nice although it feels some what sad...
    Poems from the heart...



    love..
     
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  19. Esme

    Esme Poeta adicto al portal

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    Thank you for your time and comment :) my plesure to have your presence here in my small corner. :) hugs and kissesss!
     
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    If only that man could love you, you would be so happy, and your sweet dreams could ever come true. Great poem, my dear friend, it is a pleasure to read your sad poem. Hope you find another great love, you deserve to be love.
    my stars and hughs.
    (Si tan solo ese hombre te amara, serías tan feliz, y tus dulces sueños se harían siempre realidad. Gran poema, mi querida amiga, es un placer leer tu triste poema. Deseo que encuentres otro gran amor, mereces ser amada.
    mis estrellas y abrazos)
     
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  21. Esme

    Esme Poeta adicto al portal

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    Amiga muchas gracias por tus buenos deseos! y si talvez algun dia llegara otro
    amor y creeme lo voy a estar esperando con brasos abiertos. besitosss cuidate bella. :0 :::hug:::
     
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  22. Liz Barrio

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    Such a beautiful verses, I loved to read them.
    All my stars, the brightest, and a kiss for you,:::hug:::
     
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  23. Esme

    Esme Poeta adicto al portal

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    Hola bella cuanto gusto mirarle por aqui en mi pequeno espacio:) muchas gracias por tu tiempo y comentario. Un gran placer para mi amiga. Besossss y abrasos. :):::hug:::
     
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    Pescador nublado Poeta que considera el portal su segunda casa

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    Desalentador sin duda elcontenido, pero aún así crear algo así ayuda a olvidar.El final es excelente.Un placer pasar por aqui Esme.
     
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  25. Esme

    Esme Poeta adicto al portal

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    Muchisimas gracias por tu comentario amigo. Un placer para mi mirarte por mis letras. Besitossss!!! :::hug:::
     
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  26. poroeta

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    Is sweet alright, and yet sad, like finding out your true love... never was. a pleasure reading.
     
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  27. Esme

    Esme Poeta adicto al portal

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    Thank you for your time. It's a
    pleasure recieving you. Kisses.:::hug:::
     
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  28. Faetón

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    Así que también escribes en inglés, Esme. La verdad, ni sabía que aquí se pudiera escribir en otro idioma que no fuera el español. "Escribir en el cielo lo que siento por ti", "ver cómo tu nombre ha desaparecido del cielo"... Te quedaron muy bien esas metáforas. Disfruté mucho de tu poema, en el que destaca esa anáfora del título: "Si sólo pudiera...".

    Espero que ya se hayan curado tus alas rotas y que puedas volar con ellas, y que ese corazón roto al que dedicas el poema no te rompa el corazón.

    Besos y estrellas, amiga.
     
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  29. Esme

    Esme Poeta adicto al portal

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    Faetón,

    Gracias por pasar y leer mis letras.
    Me da gusto que disfrutes de mis escritos:)
    los tuyos tambien son de un contenido unico y al
    igual me encantan:). Por suerte mis heridas an sanado,
    ahora vuelo por estos mimos cielos pero con mas fuersas. Ahora vuelo con la
    experencia que el dolor algun dia me dejo.
    Un beso sincero de mi corazon.

    Esme:::hug::::::hug:::
     
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  30. zahir

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    I only I could have you everyday and every hour by my side. Well, maybe nothing in this world is impossible. I hope your wishes to become a truth. Your writting is completely emotional. I like this poem.

    A pleasure coming here!

    Ciao! :::hug:::
     
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